[Domani]

good try on your first attempt,

shadows and bad pose will only be eliminated with time and experience.
b4 then, the photographer has whole lot other shit to worry
about because there are so many elements to work with.

also with studio, this is one type of photography where
the photog has to a lot relay on the gear... there is only so
much one can do with 1, 2, 3 or even 4 lights...